Want to know how agents look at the first page of your sample chapters? Now you can find that out. I am a literary agent with the Leslie H. Stobbe Literary Agency, but I was a writer before I became an agent, and I know how hungry writers are for professional feedback.
One of the hardest things about form rejections is that there is no way to learn what you're doing right and what you're doing wrong. Send your work, and I'll tell you exactly how I would examine your sample pages if it came into my submissions mailbox. (No picture books, please.)
This is a critique of my initial reaction to your page covering premise, character, voice, dialogue, grammar and punctuation issues. I don't work on Sundays, so please don't order a 24-hour gig on a Saturday night or a Sunday morning. Thanks!