I will give developmental feedback on your first chapter

I'll read your first pages and tell you honestly what's working, what isn't, and what to fix first.

I look at what keeps a reader going: the opening hook, voice, pacing, character introduction, point of view, and clarity. Standard and Premium orders include an annotated manuscript with margin comments, plus a summary of your top priorities, so you know exactly where to start revising.

This is a fast, affordable way to get professional eyes on your story before you invest in a full-manuscript evaluation. If you want deeper feedback later, my full developmental evaluation picks up where this leaves off.

I work in all fiction genres, specializing in action, drama, thriller, sci-fi (especially military), and post-apocalyptic.

About me: I'm a Marine combat veteran (Infantry Unit Leader), firefighter/AEMT, and fiction writer with a Master's in English and Creative Writing. I've taught adults and learners transitioning to adulthood for 26 years, so my feedback is direct, organized, and built to help you improve.

Want to talk it through? Add a one-on-one video call to go over your feedback live.

Message me before ordering with your genre and word count.