Why This Version Works
Feature Benefit
Short subject line Just role and location—looks personal
No spam words No "confidential," "retained," or "distinguished"
Conversational tone Sounds like a real person, not a bot
Under 100 words Short messages get read and replied to
Personalized Mentions his actual current role (CMO at )
Clear next step "If you're interested, I can send over the full brief"
No buzzwords Simple, direct language
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